Stitches

Can u rate this poem...?

out of 10 ok...this is about a women killing her guy!no offense meant..its dark poetry..plz rate it..and correct my mistakes/english cuz i cant speak it well... thanks♥ grounded this sheer sunflame aroused... over decayed corpse of my shattered spouse.. loved his aroma,the cauldron of his spice.. neverthless betrayel lead me into his veiled demise... shredding his wounds with spatula of death.. darkness showered through intense love of romantic myths.. caressing palms once stroked passionate hunger now blood kisses 2 u,shunning ur pale white finger... ur successlent lips,estacy stitched fear said... burn ur false love,warmth of ur sugar breath i scrumble by the sleepless nights of tears lead.. taste of my love,proven bitter 4 ur life as i pile ur flesh cubes,bury them deep inside...♂♀

Public Comments

1. i think its good...i like it
2. As far as dark poem this one is good. I give it a 8.5
3. I LOVE YOUR POEM!!!!! I am a 49-year-old lady who loves to write and I can tell you are young. You have such passion and a unique way of expressing yourself. I read your poem to my friend and he was amazed as well. I have edited it a bit for you. I hope you like it! Please click on my Avatar then on my 360 profile to learn more about me! You have a GREAT future with your poetry! It's fiery, spicy, unique, descriptive and really allowed me to understand you pain, anger, passion and it's a ten (12) not a 10!!!! Grounded this sheer sun flame aroused Over the decayed corpse of my shattered spouse I once loved his aroma, sweet cauldron of spice Now betrayal drove me to his veiled demise Shredding his wounds with my razor of death Darkness towering over a romantic myth Caressing palms once stroked passionate hunger Now blood kisses to your pale white finger Succulent lips, ecstasy stitched fear said Burn your false love, warmth of your sugar breath I crumble by the sleepless nights of tears shed Taste of my love, proven bitter now dead As I pile your flesh cubes trying to hide Burning anger for you forever inside